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If it's not one re-write, it's another...
Feb. 11th, 2005 03:18 am[Edit: January 11th, 2007 - The main problem with this story is that I have no idea who the audience is. Am I aiming at kids? Teenagers? Adults? I don't think I've ever figured out how to pitch it. Still, it's kind of cute. And, as always, trying to let characters play with gender stereotypes to some degree.]
Working on the re-write (and first posting) of "Splintered Soul", but in the meantime I wound up digging up and doing a bit of editing on "The Tree's Legacy" Draft 1. Hey, at least it's constructive procrastination, right? ... Right?
This draft is cleaned up a bit, with some extraneous adjectives removed and a bit of tweaking with the ending. I think it's overall a bit more clear and effective, but I'm still not overly thrilled with it. Feedback would make my day.
So without further ado...
( The Tree's Legacy, Draft 2 - Vignette, 600 words )
I've been contemplating submitting this piece as an application to![[livejournal.com profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/external/lj-community.gif)
fictionslamming, but I can't decide if it would just get slammed into the ground as being "not hopelessly artsy enough". I dunno. What do y'all think?
Working on the re-write (and first posting) of "Splintered Soul", but in the meantime I wound up digging up and doing a bit of editing on "The Tree's Legacy" Draft 1. Hey, at least it's constructive procrastination, right? ... Right?
This draft is cleaned up a bit, with some extraneous adjectives removed and a bit of tweaking with the ending. I think it's overall a bit more clear and effective, but I'm still not overly thrilled with it. Feedback would make my day.
So without further ado...
( The Tree's Legacy, Draft 2 - Vignette, 600 words )
I've been contemplating submitting this piece as an application to
fictionslamming, but I can't decide if it would just get slammed into the ground as being "not hopelessly artsy enough". I dunno. What do y'all think?
